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My Darling

Postby Dark Fantasies » Sun Jan 27, 2008 11:55 pm

The continuous of Lost in the Shadows of Love. :) I do not own the rights for this story, but I give the rights to the respected Creator. This has no relations with Emotional Distress.
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Chapter 1 A Fascinating Surprise
Rating T
Type: Marisa, Asriel, and Lyra
Summary: A child is born. Born from two very passionate and powerful parents.This is fan fiction is how they met and bore a child, a child filled with a prophecy and a great betrayal. A child named Lyra.
Written by Hayley Anne
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It was a few months since parting with Asriel, Marisa was planning a fancy party with some of her friends. She sat by herself with a pad of paper in her lap, and a pen end pressed against her lips. The Golden Monkey was just on the perch of the chair helping her out. Her shady blue eyes had no hid of emotion that lingered inside her heart. She simply didn't care anymore about love. Edward had began to blather about his work, at times she would just brush him away and tell him to leave her be. She stared at the piece of paper in front of her, it said 5 names written down.

The Plan of Attendees
1. Mr & Mrs Dorurem
2. Mr Lord Chesmen
3. Ms Katren
4. Dr & Ms Rofertson
5. Lord Egregious



Marisa just looked deep at the picture on the wall, by the fireplace. It was a picture of Marisa and Edward, and of course their Dæmon's. She rolled her eyes and got up off from the chair, threw the pad of paper on the table and went into the kitchen.

She swiftly made her way to the counter and got a cup. Marisa then turned the water on for tea and then got a bag of chocolat from the cabinet. She then put her hands frustratedly onto the sink, put her head down and a few tears fell from her face. At once Marisa could feel her heart ache, her mind wonder and her Dæmon would bring back bad memories. Yet again she was thinking of Asriel, being in his arms and him kissing her tightly. She didn't smile, frown or the anger didn't show. It felt as if her emotions weren't there, it made her feel dead, just dead. The Golden Monkey looked at her while sitting on the counter, his head was moved slightly back and forth.

Her mind started to wonder and her throat tightened. Her hands were still on the sink, then she glanced at her Dæmon. The Golden Monkey leaped to the sink counter next to Marisa. An understanding came through them like a spiritual guide.

There was a knock at the front door. Marisa looked around the kitchen room. She whipped her eyes, and quickly made her way to the front door. She opened it to find her friend, Ms Katren.

"Oh, hello Mrs. Coulter." Ms Katren said giving her an eye.

"Hello Ms Katren, how is everything? Come in." Marisa said as she moved to the other side to let her friend in the house.

"Everything is fine Marisa," she said sitting down on the couch. "and how are you?"

Marisa didn't know what to say to what her friend had said, she didn't know how to even respond. All her thoughts were dug deep into the dirt. "Everything is going fine." Marisa said faking her smile and her intoxicating words. Everything was not fine.

"You know Marisa I met a very nice and intelligent man today." She eyed her friend and this time she was blathering. Marisa then heard the tea kettle go on and then she went in and took it off the stove.

"Would you like some chocolat?" Marisa asked politely.

"Yes please."

Marisa brought two cups of chocolat in, and then set them on the table. She sat close next to her friend and sat the pad of paper in her lap. The Golden Monkey was around the hawk Dæmon.

"Who did you meet Marie?" Marisa said as she put the cup close to her lips.

"Well he is a very intelligent man and explorer. He is very handsome, he works mainly in the north. I think he might even be the most famous in the museum." she quenched her eyes and then Marisa just eyed hers in the movements.

"Yes. And what is his name Marie?" Marisa asked.

"His name is Asriel. Lord Asriel Belacqua." Marisa's heart nearly sank in hearing his name. She sat up in alert, and her Dæmon looked at her in the same manner. All Marisa wanted in the entire world was not to see him. She thought of how he kissed her and held her, she felt cold and weary, for what her friend was saying she didn't want to hear any more.

Marisa's throat tightened, a smile came off her face. "So, you meet with Lord Asriel?" she asked with a clever response.
Marie's brow went up, and her eye's got flirtatious. "Indeed, Marisa I did meet him. Do you know him?"

Marisa looked deep to the floor and she laughed in a fake tone. "Yes. Edward introduced me to him. For one of his businesses trips to the Royal Arctic institute."

"He is handsome." Marie said looking up, then back at Marisa on the couch. She saw her smile and then began to talk some more.

A few minutes of talking and drinking some chocolate, and Marisa was getting very uncomfortable in talking about Asriel. Marie was starting to get ready to go. She got up, Marisa did as well and she led her to the door. "Well please come again." Marisa said as Marie was at the door, she stopped and then looked at Marisa.

"Could you do me a favor Marisa?"

Marisa could feel her Dæmon shudder, with already knowing. "Sure, what is it?" she asked.

"Could you please invite Lord Asriel to the party tonight?"

Marisa could feel her legs feel weak and her mind become different. She smiled with an angry tone and then answered, "My pleasure, I'd love too."

"Thanks. See you tonight." she exited the house as Marisa then closed the door behind her. She looked into the mirror next to the door. Then her eyes turned out of control her face became different. Marisa looked into her Dæmon's eyes. Why couldn't we have said no? They thought.

"I don't want to see him. I feel different around him. Why couldn't we say no?" she saw the golden monkey leap into her breast. She sighed softly as she headed into the living room, and grabbed her pencil and the pad of paper. She heisted when writing down the name of,

Lord Asriel.
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Postby latency » Mon Jan 28, 2008 12:17 am

Writing Fascism:

She swiftly made her way to the counter and had gotten a cup. Marisa then turned the water on for tea and then had gotten a bag of chocolat from the cabinet.


Beware of repeated past-tense statements, especially using the same verb, they tend to break up structure. Consider something like:

She swiftly made her way to the counter and took a cup from the draining board. Marisa then turned the water on for tea and then had gotten a bag of chocolat from the cabinet, but she put it back onto the counter and leant her hands frustratedly on the sink. A few tears fell from her face, and she felt her heart ache, her mind wander and her Dæmon bring back bad memories.


Excellent start other than that, a dysfunctional marriage is a tricky place to be, looking forward to more :)
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Postby Dark Fantasies » Mon Jan 28, 2008 12:36 am

Oops. Thank you for helping me I appreciate it. ;)

Glad you liked it, hope this story goes somewhere. :)
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Postby Dark Fantasies » Wed Jan 30, 2008 1:41 pm

A small update, will add more through out the day. :)
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Postby fbi_woman » Wed Jan 30, 2008 6:19 pm

ooo interesting. look forward to more ;)
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Postby Dark Fantasies » Thu Jan 31, 2008 2:37 am

Thank you Kelly. A small update. :)
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Postby Dark Fantasies » Sun Feb 03, 2008 2:15 pm

Updates are wonderful. :)
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Postby fbi_woman » Sun Feb 03, 2008 3:09 pm

ooooo exciting!!! I can't wait for the par-tay!
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Postby Dark Fantasies » Tue Feb 05, 2008 11:35 pm

Glad you will like it Kelly. :p

Reader's in mind, I really like writing this for you all to read. Really. I will try to write the party part very soon promise. :)

Update. Feb 14. Starting on the party. I have it written on paper but I have to type it. ;)
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My Darling II

Postby Dark Fantasies » Thu Feb 14, 2008 10:40 pm

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Chapter II Curiosity
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Marisa quickly put her hair in a bun, as her Dæmon sat beside her on her dressing table. Her face had a sent of flowers and her make-up light up her expression. The doorbell rang, she could sense that her friends were coming. Asriel. She thought, as she should have told her friend no he wasn't welcome. She smoothed her slick golden dress, and was watching the eyes of her Dæmon. She took in a deep nervous breath as her Dæmon leaped on her arm. Her heart embraced her chest as she was pacing her way down the stairs. She looked at a mirror next to the door, her passionate eyes that just knew how dangerous she can become. Marisa then began to look around the room. Everything is looking lovely, she thought to herself.

Now she took in another deep breath, and gracefully walking to the door she slowly opened it up. Her heart sank, it was only her husband with another woman.

"Hello darling," he said walking into the room. "You look stunning." he walked over to her and kissed her cheek.

Marisa smiled, and just what is this thing? she thought. Her eye brows went up. "Who's this young lady?" Marisa said trying not to be mean.

"Oh, how rude of me," he cleared his throat. Marisa could just sense he was up to something, just how his Dæmon looked at the young woman's. "This is Ms. Pointing. She works at the office with me now. Ms. Pointing, this is my wife Mrs. Coulter."

The woman had her hand out for a shake, but Marisa just looked at her and smiled. She didn't want to even think of shaking her hand. The woman passed Marisa and then walked into the flat.

Marisa then rolled her eyes and said to her Dæmon. Yeah. I bet she just works with you. I bet she does more for you then I can do. She then began to think of Asriel again, that same warm feeling came into mind every time. Asriel cared about me, and Edward does not. I think I am in love with Asriel. Oh, why did I leave him like that. Why?

"Marisa are you alright?" asked Edward.

She looked at him wide eyed. "Yes I am fine." she lied.

"Oh, darling, I passed some of your friends and they will be here shortly. Well I hear them now."

Marisa tried to smile, "Thank you, Edward." she said as he left and went into the kitchen. When she heard that her heart sank again in her blood. Asriel she thought to herself quietly. She could hear voices, her heart was in her throat. Just smile and try to act appropriate, she thought. In her thoughts that raced throughout her mind, she knew she had to control her emotions now. She could see them all coming toward her now, she put on a fake smile and then greeted them all. She stood upright and tried to hid her passionate eyes in the dusk of the night. She then saw her Dæmon sit on one of the steps below her. He could tug her thoughts, when he stood up because there were two Dæmon's coming his way.

He quickly ran onto her shoulder and then he became distressed. "What is it?" she asked him. His black forefinger pointed outward into the darkness. Marisa followed his finger with her eyes, then saw a man and a woman. Woman and Dæmon both perched up, with their eyes wide.

"Well hello Marisa," said Ms Katren. "you remember Lord Asriel don't you?" she asked.

Marisa and Asriel's eyes were locked with much greed. She smiled, "Indeed I do. Hello to the both of you."

"Hello Mrs. Coulter, how are you?" he asked.

"I am fine thank you." she lied. "please come in." Her heart was stabbing her chest.

The snow leopard looked at the monkey, both looked at each other. The snow leopard could sense that something was wrong. Marisa's eyes met with Asriel's and he walked into the room. She turned around, and then began to look deeply at Asriel.

Marisa was just standing at the door as one of her friend came over to her side. Her eyes were still on Asriel.

"Well I must say Marisa, Edward is a good politician. " said a friend.

"Yes, I do think so too," she said feeling bored. "if you will excuse me."

Marisa tried to get some fresh air. So, she went up the stairs and went into a room, a room just with a balcony. Asriel saw her go up the stairs swiftly, and sensed there was something wrong. Marisa opened the two small doors and looked deeply at the star Lyra; the one Asriel told her about.

As Asriel walked up the stairs and went into the room where Marisa was, he stopped and hid under the dark chair in the corner. He hid due to he heard Mr. Coulter's voice. Edward had walked in and he opened the two doors were his wife was.

"What are you looking at Marisa?" asked Edward with his hands behind his back.

Marisa was longing for it to be Asriel's not her husband. "Just a star, a lucky star." she said.

Edward kissed her cheek, and then kissed her lips.

Asriel saw the two of them kissing, he then just looked deeply and then he walked away.

Marisa pulled away from the kiss, feeling curious and full of wonderment. Her Dæmon was feeling indifferent. Marisa just looked into the eyes of her husband, she could sense in his eyes he was up to something. So, why is he being so affectionate? At parties and other places they were at he would never kiss her in public, so what was he up to? Her Dæmon threw questions into her mind like shredded paper.

"What is it, Edward?" Marisa asked shocked.

"Nothing darling, you know I love you," he started to kiss her on the neck. "I always told you that didn't I?"

Marisa was just pushing him off her and looked at him with disgust. No, he never told her that he loved her. And what was his problem. "I just have to say why you brought a young woman here, on this special night of mine. And also no you never told me you loved me, not once and not ever," She moved away from his side, she stood up right and then walked away from him to find Asriel. Then just as she walked beside the two doors she turned to him. "oh, and Edward. I just have to say that I don't like that other woman in this flat." she looked at him coldly and walked away from him.

He looked at her stunned, and stood lonely on the balcony. He would never think his wife would ever just leave him stand out on the balcony before. Maybe she was just jealous, he thought as he just looked at the silver eyes of his Dæmon.

Marisa went angrily down the stairs, she didn't want to even think of Edward or even hear his name or voice. That voice bored her so dearly and made her skin crawl. Her Dæmon followed her with a growl and a pout.

"Marisa what is it?" asked one of her friends, trying to keep her from crying.

"Nothing just leave me be, if you don't mind." Marisa said as her friend just looked at her, as she past his side.

"Sure, Marisa."

Marisa just went into the back and then she past a lot of people and then went outside. She found her way into the small and wide backyard full of flowers and beautiful silver liner of the trees. She found herself leaning on one of the tree stumps, tears flowing down her face. She looked up at the star Lyra.

"Lyra. That is a beautiful name." she said as she looked at the star and then up at the balcony where her husband was. She saw the woman that she had seen earlier with him. The woman was touching his face with her hands and then they began to kiss. Marisa wanted to yell at him, but her gut said don't. Just because she knew he didn't love her or did she even care about him at all? No. She didn't, because Asriel was the only one to care about her.

As her tears were down as far down her face as they would go. She could hear someone behind her, someone pulling her close to him. Someone whispering in her ear. "Lets get out of here." She could not look up, she didn't even care anymore, when she did look up her heart lit up. Her world came to a clear understanding. She looked so deeply at him, it seemed though she had known him for years then months. He lifted her in his strong arms and then carried her some where beyond the star Lyra.

She thought for one moment, I love this man. Is there a way I can be with him?

Asriel. She thought to herself, still in his arms, she put her head on his shoulder. Then he told her to calm down. See he cares about me, that whole day she thought of him. And there he was, acting more like a husband then her own. Asriel.
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Postby Dark Fantasies » Sat Feb 16, 2008 1:14 am

Update.
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Postby Cireal » Sat Feb 16, 2008 5:27 pm

it is wonderfull)))
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Postby fbi_woman » Sat Feb 16, 2008 9:48 pm

aww I feel bad for her. Edward's a pig lol. One drop dead gorgeous woman should be enough :p.
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Postby Dark Fantasies » Tue Feb 19, 2008 2:43 am

Update. *****

Kelly try to read the ending of chapter two. I was trying to make him a pig. :lol:
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Postby fbi_woman » Tue Feb 19, 2008 1:57 pm

awww. I think they should make out really loudly by the balcony so Edward sees that Marisa can get a little action on the side too :p.
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My Darling III

Postby Dark Fantasies » Tue Feb 19, 2008 11:22 pm

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Asriel carried Marisa beside him, supporting her along the way. Indeed, he was angry with her for lying to him, but he did have a some love in his chest for her. He tried not to say anything, that would lead to an argument, so he kept quiet. He loved and cared about her since the time she got lost in the institute. Those passionate eyes and that beautiful face that seemed timid. He led her to an old tree stump close to a old cabin, that hasn't been used in years. There was a bench close by, so he took her to the bench. She sat down, full of anger that filled her gaze. Asriel didn't sit by her, he stood up walking back and forth in many circles, trying to fully understand why she would lie to him. Did she lie to him? Or did he misinterpret her actions? He really wanted to know how she felt about her husband.

"Marisa," he paused not looking at her. "what happened on the balcony?"

Marisa could feel her tears falling on her chest, his voice followed her ears like a passionate music that lifted her mood. It was the voice that she really wanted to hear, then the anger beneath the volume. Her heart lifted her and her face, she looked at his face for a long time. Trying to understand and interpret his feelings. "Asriel I-," she hesitated for words, she didn't know what to say. "I don't know." was all she could say. This time her cleverness didn't shine. It was because she loved him.

He looked at her and his passion met with hers. "Marisa I want to know why he did that to you."

"I don't know Asriel," she paused and looked at the ground. "are all men that cruel? Oh, Asriel why does this have to be so hurtful to my heart, I mean I don't even know if I love him? Why is he kissing that other woman?" She stopped and sobbed feeling weak and unable to continue.

Asriel gathered her in his arms lifting her from the ground, "All men are not like that Marisa, it is just some that don't know how much they love that person until it is too late." she looked at him for the longest moment; their eyes and hearts set on that moment. Her gaze did not leave his not once, he looked at the balcony, and then looked back at Marisa.

Just that shine of love and greed was in their eyes, a thing that was not there before. "Marisa I want you never to be hurt by him again." Her heart was on the edge of collapsing and falling, but it was in the support of Asriel's. She continued to look deeply at him. She sobbed and then closed her eyes. All of a sudden, their lips were merged together, so strongly.

An embrace, was loaded with satisfaction. Every ounce of the air flickered, and the stars were shining brightly; very brightly. The crescent moon was enough for the bright passion that would come before the star, the star Lyra. It was hard to resist lobe that filled Marisa and Asriel, the greedily and very passionate time it was for both of them.

In the dusk of the night there cast a shadow, a shadow of love and light. Time could not fear the wisest of the moon and the gleam of the earth. A prophecy was set on a child, a child very different to a modern child. A young child will have far more tasks of any delight and courage. Many witches have been told through many centuries of this child, a child born of a great betrayal and destiny. The witches found their child, so then they put their hands together as one and then the star Lyra light up, with courage sent with in the sun and stars. Lyra, they chanted as one, again, Lyra, louder and louder they became. Lyra!

In the cabin, a cabin known to be honored by the Coulter's for their own delight and hospitality. For one thing Marisa usually used the cabin for her own way of getting away from her husband. The cabin had rows of logs and other kinds of tree coatings along with the linear bark. Inside the stuffy cabin laid a fire place in the far end by a casement. Then sat a table with two couches with the sitting of a coffee table. The small table by farther left couch was a lamp. And of course was a picture of the Coulter's wedding picture in a case up by the fireplace.

In the floor sat two Dæmon, a snow leopard, and a monkey. They both were very close together, they then both touched each other's head. The snow leopard began to lick the monkey, as he had a strong grip of the leopards fur.

Marisa opened her eyes, she was lying in the bed. She turned as her stomach began to hurt, then she saw Asriel beside her, his back turned. She smiled and then wanted to know if he was awake.

"Asriel," she muttered, she felt happy. Nothing, "Asriel?" she repeated, as she touched his back.

Marisa could hear him mutter, "Yes?" she longed to hear his passionate voice again, and again.

"Do you think this was a mistake?" Just for that question she had asked made him turn around facing her. Her heart light up, he looked deeply at her and began to kiss her on the head.

"I don't think so," he smiled as she did as well, the biggest possible. "it just happened, and I really thing Edward -" Marisa stopped him by putting her hand on his mouth. She moved closer to him, her heart was beating loudly inside her throat. "you need someone that loves you Marisa."

"Someone like you, Asriel?" she said in a flirtatious tone. She looked deeply at him and began to kiss him again. They fell fast asleep beside each other once again.
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"Where's Marisa? She is supposed to give a speech of some sort. Where is she!" Edward demanded as Carlo was beside him.

"I don't know, I am sure she is around somewhere."

"How do you know?"

"You know your own wife. She talks too much about how everything is right or wrong. And you know she is probably in her cabin that you two built a while ago."

"Alright I will look." Edward said as he walked away.

"And what did you do to your wife?"

Edward looked at him and then rolled his eyes. "None of your business. And why does she always invite you." he said and then walked away from his side. He began to walk outside, he then saw the cabin. Edward then called his wife's name a few times. He knocked at the door, knowing she would be in there.
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Marisa could hear someone at the door, she shock up right, moving away from Asriel.

"Whats wrong?" he asked.

"Someone is at the door," she heisted this time more then ever. "oh, Asriel I just wonder what will happen now."

"Just calm down Marisa, it will be fine." They both got out of bed, and Marisa then walked to a closet.

"Stay in here for a minute." she said as she kissed him.

Marisa then walked to the mirror, and fixed her hair and then she made the bed. All that time into doing so her stomach was twisting and turning in knots. She quickly made her way to the door, and then opened it up. It was Edward.

"Well, hello Marisa." he said trying to kiss her. She moved back and then walked towards the closet. She knew Asriel was watching them. "why are you angry with me?" he asked.

Marisa couldn't believe he had wanted to toy with her emotions. "I really do not want to talk to you about that Edward." she said not looking at him, she thought of him with disgust. Then nausea filled her stomach, and then she felt the pain of what the nauseous was doing to her.

"Alright," he said as his hands went over his head. "just come on, your friends are wondering where you are," all he did was look at her. "so, are you coming?" he asked.

The room smelled different, and it got intense as the candle began to get hotter. "Indeed, I will be there in a minute." she said, she smiled and began to walk away from his side. He looked at her and then began to walk out of the cabin.

She watched him coldly, as he left. She shut the door behind her and then walked to the closet. "Is everything alright Mrs. Coulter?" said a voice behind her. She stopped with a long sigh. He rushed by her side, "are you ok, you look pale." he put a hand on her arm.

She looked at him, with hatred her blue eyes seemed to rage. "Yes. I am fine Carlo. Just get away from me." she tugged her arm away from his grip. Asriel was in the closet wanting to get out. Carlo began to put his arms around her, she pushed him and scratched him. "Leave me alone!" she yelled, as he tried to strangle her but she kicked him off her.

He then tried it again, and this time he was on top of her. She dug her fingers in his flesh. She pushed him away from her but he kept coming back. "Asriel!" she screamed in panic, she didn't mean to say his name but she needed him.

Asriel came out of the closet in a heart beat. His strong shoulders knocked Carlo off to the ground. "You leave her alone!" he said as Marisa was in tears on the bed. Frightened she almost began to run, the sight of Asriel made her seem safe.

"Oh I see. You two have feelings for each other." he said figuring it out. "I thought I was right of the sight of you two that time at the presentation." They both didn't say a word, not even looking at each other. "am I right?" he asked. They didn't answer, so he assumed he was right.

Then Marisa spoke, "Why be so frank Carlo?" she didn't move a muscle. "I don't understand why you would not tell me about my husband's affair with his office assistant." her eye brows raised.

"He isn't having an affair Marisa," said Carlo so coldly.

"Then why are you defending him?" she asked getting up. Her stomach was twisting in knots, she could feel the nausea come up her throat. "Asriel is just my friend. Why would you think that something would be going on?" she watched Carlo coldly, then she looked at Asriel he did the same. She could feel her nausea come even further.

"I think I will tell Edward about this!"

Marisa laughed, "Then I will tell him that you attempted to hurt me. And, I will also tell him that you made an agreement to remove him from office, by killing him."

"How do you know about that!" he demanded.

"It's just a thing that us women find out." she looked at him as he slowly moved away from them. "and Carlo," she wanted to scream it. "I never want to see you around here again." She turned her back to him and ran into the bathroom. Lord Asriel watched him coldly as he left the cabin, he then went to the bathroom door to see if Marisa was alright.
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Postby Dark Fantasies » Sat Feb 23, 2008 1:03 am

Almost finished!

(she is pregnant by the way!) ;)
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Postby JoeSchmo » Sat Feb 23, 2008 1:24 am

It's really good! Can't wait for more!
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Seems so unjust - no camera, not even a photograph of her for him to have

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Postby Dark Fantasies » Sun Feb 24, 2008 12:01 am

Thank you. :)
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Postby ArcT » Sun Feb 24, 2008 12:07 am

It's very impressive :) You've got quite a talent there - I like the development through the story. I'd probably (if I was me) introduced Edward in the first installment, especially if I was submitting it into a forum in parts (simply for making the story easier and so it flows easier from installment to installment), but that's really just nitpicking. There's nothing I can think of this early in the morning that's bad, but I'll be able to do a better critique tomorrow :P
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Postby fbi_woman » Sun Feb 24, 2008 2:42 am

yay I can't wait for the rest :D
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Postby Dark Fantasies » Sun Feb 24, 2008 7:46 pm

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Chapter IV Stomach Aches
Rating T
Written by Hayley Anne/Dark Fantasies
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Marisa sat by the sink, her hands on the ends, with in the linear of the stones. Her stomach ached and twisted in her gut, her mind all over the place.

"Marisa," said Asriel, beside the door. "are you alright?" he asked.

She didn't answer him, in pain and then nausea she didn't speak. Her tears flew down her face, her Dæmon was beside her. She brushed him away and then finally spoke. "I am fine Asriel." she said as he heard her walk to the door, she opened it, then stood beside him. He looked at her, with her face wet with tears, and her face looked different.

His arms were around her, "What is the matter?" he asked waiting for an answer.

"I am fine really, my stomach is hurting all of a sudden." she said breaking from his embrace. After all she did love to be in his arms. "Asriel," she muttered turning around, facing him. "thank you for everything you have told me for as long as we have known each other." she smiled. She looked at him for as long as she thought of him, her Dæmon was reaching for the snow leopard's paw.

He moved to her side, "Your welcome." he kissed her, for her shock she did too. "we should get going."

"Indeed. We should." Marisa then went away from his side, she found the candles were on their last core. She blew them out, and found Asriel beside her. "Did you want to come as well?" she asked.

"Of course, I will always be by your side." he kissed her hand, that made her smile. "What is it for anyway? Your friend never mentioned it?" he asked.

She looked deep into his eyes, she felt weak at the moment, but she didn't show it to him. "Today is my twenty second birthday."

"Well then, happy birthday Marisa." he said laughing. She joined him, and led him out of the cabin.

They both went outside, where the long dark streaks of the shadows of night lingered within love. Marisa led Asriel to the back door, in which was open like always. She saw some of her friends talking and some just enjoying themselves. She then saw Asriel depart her side, she had a bit of sadness in her eyes. She could see everyone looking at her, she loved being the center of attention rather then her husband. "I want to thank everyone that came here." she could feel her stomach tighten. "if you will all be honored I would like to have a toast." everyone grabbed a cup of either chocolat or a wine. Marisa was handed some wine, but she declined. Then she just got a cup of chocolat from her husband's tray. She didn't look at him, the sight of him with the woman made her just want to throw the cup at him. "I would like to give this toast to Lord Asriel for finding a very interesting artifact he found in the north. I am sure he would like to show you all in the museum, in Oxford." she paused, with all the eyes on her, she hesitated but continued. "also to my friend for finally finding a decent man." she then looked coldly at her husband. "that's all, cheers."

They all set their glasses up high and said "Cheers."

She felt dizzy, her head felt like it was spinning, and her stomach conquered her mind and brain. She felt her Dæmon tug her with his powerful thoughts. She took in a deep breath and then fainted.
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Postby Cireal » Mon Feb 25, 2008 6:49 pm

It's really good! thanks for this)
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Postby willaa » Tue Feb 26, 2008 1:16 am

Dark Fantasies wrote:
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Chapter IV Pregnant
Rating T
Written by Hayley Anne
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whoa
first of all
good job there
second does this mean your done
or is this just the next chapter name you wanted to just throw out there....?
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Postby Dark Fantasies » Tue Feb 26, 2008 11:08 am

Working on it. Sorry. ;)
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